Symphonic Nonsense
As I look into a mirror of self reflections....thoughts caress my mind in a symphony of contemplation
Its rhythms are broken but unhindered
freed from the simplistic calcification of self gratification
and yet
never
on beat
constantly and emphatically reminding me of all the dreams and wishes I once had that have been stolen or lost, and I don't which is true.
and it continues without hesitation towards its ultimate destination
Its pace is staggeringly slow but intense
filled with the passionate personification of my emancipation
and yet
Im
not free
always and forever locked behind a mask that will never change because I have given the key away to another person, and I've forgotten there name.
and it continues without hesitation towards its ultimate destination
Its music is expressively painful and loud
resounding forth with the intensification of my misdirection
and still
pleasant
to me
its melodies are a blanket of truth wrapped in the arms of my faults that keep me perusing something greater, but I just don't know what.
and as quickly as it began its recitation of desperation
it stops
and
I rest
finding peace in the silence
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Falling Into Pieces
Im sorry for the things I do wrong
Im sorry for the things I can't undo
The words of my mouth cannot compare
to the beating of my heart.
Come near once more
Come near once more
Im falling into pieces
realizing who I am inside
Im Falling into pieces
dying to know Im alive
I wear a mask of many colors
my face you will never see
hidden deep inside
Its brilliance is my deception
Hiding the true, the real, me
Careful pieces put in places
delicately laid and set
a master craftsman of discretion
finding hope in my darkness
Come near once more
Come near once more
Im falling into pieces
realizing who I am inside
Im Falling into pieces
dying to know Im alive
Can I fall in love with you once more
Can I go back to the places we once were one
Can I feel your warm embrace hold me close again
9 comments:
I have no idea what your first poem said. It sounded pretty though.
Lol, well I guess I will say thank you and see what others think, I think
Liked the second one! I wish this would let me look at the poems as I type lol. The first was really deep! I spent a few minutes looking over it and I believe I got what you were getting at. It's about how we get caught up in our "dreams" and our supposed "freedom" that we as Christians so greatly flaunt. "We're going to Heaven, cus we've got Jesus." -says someone as they get ready to slander someone for their unbelief in Christ. I think maybe you're getting at that we need to be real with ourselves, God, and our fellow sinners, so that we can get rid of this mask that blinds all of us except for God. The silence at the end I think would personify the action of accepting what's going on, who we are, and the fact that we all need Christ. Normally when one accepts a truth about themselves, atleast I work this way, kind of enter into a silence to think about it and do a little talkin' to Jesus.
I love hearing people's opinion on poetry and try my hardest to write things that evoke an emotion or thought........you are heading in the right place, I think I was more concerened with the perpetual nonesene of what our life pursuits can become.
I was reading the second poem, and man I think it would make a pretty beastly progressive rock song with jazz/drop d licks :D! I enjoy how it talks about how we as people try to mask ourselves to other people and even to God. It kind of has a message that goes out to not only God, but to the people we try to fool and deceive by hiding our Savior. More than anything though I think it's a very sound truth and a very good realization/confession for us to make with God. One that says "I'm not good, I'm wretched, and even though you want to make me good, I'm going to only take it when I feel like it,". That's something I find myself doing all the time. Sometimes I act as though God is only there when it's convenient for me. I'm sure others struggle with that as well.
Yeah, your so right. I am not sure exactly where all the inspiration came from but it is actually two poems I pieced together....
Really? Works well though. Maybe God is sovereign or something... Lol. I'm in BCP II and I finished all of my work that was supposed to last me for 2 and a half weeks in 2 days lol...
You are going to have to explain your first poem to me sometime. All I see is a bunch of long words and words that I don't use every day.
Lauren, thanks for the honesty......I will do my best one day to help you out
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